Mangal Kunj
K: In that case…. (bitter, soft) (I should sleep by myself
every nite from now then…
S:Don’t you dare! (shook a finger by her face)
She looked afraid… he felt disgusted…
S:Khanak
K:Go away..
S:You have ZERO work
life balance! (made a zero with his right hand)
K: Not ME, You! (angry)
S: That’s all I do… work…. Unlike YOU!
K:whats that supposed to mean?
S: Do I have to spell it out now? (taunting)
K:I don’t think my fam…. I don’t think… you shouldn’t be…
(biting her lower lip to hold back her tears)
S: Oh! Yes! I should be…
K:I am not begging you for support OR understanding, if you
notice (wiping away hot steamy tears, her face flushed)
S:Oh! You never beg! (derisive) Mz Pride! You never beg…
He looked at her… eyes roving over her almost nude shoulders
and her cleft…
K: If you are justifying your workaholic behavior you just succeeded
S: So you are going to Pune then?
K:He has GALL STONES.. he has had a liver transplant, you
know what that means, now if his gall bladder needs to go, its bad..(worried)
S:Cant your Fa go? He seems to have made a successful
business out of doing nothing!
She flinched visibly… truth hurt… truth from her husband
K: Thanks for the opinion (softly)
S: So you are going then?
K turned away from him, stared out the tall closet windows…
out into the Bay…….. the location was priceless… the sorroundings affluent, the
home soaked in opulence…….. but she stood in it with a huge truck load of
personal baggage… baggage that was unbearable to carry…….
S: I am going to go get your bags from the car
K: Main le loongi (without turning)
He left… she was in the closet when he returned
S: Lets go EAT! (frustrated)
K:I ate at Vrunda Aunty’s
S: No you did not! She said she only gave you poha…
K: Aap khayiye… jaakar (turning to face him, her face swollen
like a balloon)
He waited hands in his pockets… cool self assured… calm… in
a dark blue collarless tee and tan cargo shorts……….
K: I am not really hungry!
He didn’t say a word…
K: I am not going to bed after I eat…
He texted…. Unfazed…
K:I need to wash my face.. you made me cry! (blunt)
He looked up to see… was unmoved…
He followed her to the bathroom as she rinsed her face……
She sponged her face off and walked out, found three of his
towels on the bed…damp soiled…
She quietly removed them and took them with her…
He waited at the foot of the stairs while she went to the
ante room annexxe to dry them in the stand…
They walked together downstairs as he answered a call
Dadi: Ghanta ho gaya puttar, kithhe si? (where were you?)
S: In the shower.. (putting the call on hold)
D looked at the girl’s face
D:Lada tu? Khotha!
S answered her that he did not (lied)
D:Shakal vekh kudi di (look at her face)
S: Shhh Dadi! (begging)
D:Rahat haiga? De mainnu dassaan (give me the phone let me
tell him)
S walks away shaking his head,
D:You sleep with me beta
K:Jee! (smiling after a long time)
S shot a fire dart at his wife “So Now we have to play
dirty?” look
Dadi served… Khanak ate as if she were starving
He ate sparingly got smacked, told Dadi he ate at work…
Dadi admonished him, scolded her asked her to be more strict
She didn’t say a word, went back to being distant………..
Dadi talked about neighbors, the movie star that lived in
the building some family gossip,..
Khanak helped her stack away since the help had retired for
the night……
Shaan moved to the living room answering texts and phone
calls
They exchanged a long intense look……. Hadn’t said a word to
each other directly since steping down……… “make up s—was explosive “ “any s—with
Shantanu was fiery” her heart raced as she imagined it for a few moments………a
weak trembling sensation coursed through her body…….. her hands were jello like
now………..raptureous… ecstatic…….. A week had gone by……… they were out to spite
each other……… his touch and love making were the only delights in her now
depressing work life……..he made her say things she could have never imagined saying in bed…………. He fought her like he would
fight a vicious enemy……he possessed her like she was the only thing that
remained in the world………..
“I wont talk with him but will let him make love to me”
“I can still be mad at him”
“We can fight in the morning”
“I will play hard to get and then savor the seduction”
K:I want to sleep by Dadi! (barely a whisper)
S:No! Khanak(firm but softer than her tone)
Dadi heard that and breathed audibly.. smiling as she let
herself out of the kitchen through a side door towards the hallway… she knew
Khanak wanted to go to her husband………
He would make her!
wow long update
ReplyDeleteaargh where this is leading to till now this is the worst phase of shanak for me
i dont like shan here a little bit and i dont want to see khanak like this but once a while chalta hain she has so much in her plate poor girl kya karegi kabhi na kabhi toh bahar aayega hi na :(
oohh if today night they did not sleep together then this fight will become more miserable but if khanak slept with dadi then dekhne me maja aayega ki shan kya karega :P
thank u aditee for long update
update soon :)
a brilliant update aditeee! splendid!
ReplyDeleteMe love dadi so generous and giving....she can read this couple throughout :P
both are correct in the views...shantanu will never understand the choas of a middle class family especially when she is a sole person who is dealing with a half of the useless family though the taunt abt Fa is bang on but khanak is correct too it doesnt excuse him from being away from home
lol! cant wait for the seducation part of how both will break the ice...abhi dunoo are on fire :P
thank you aditee aur idna intezaar nahi karena plz :D :P
Loved it..:) I dont know why but I like ShaNak fight and argument..It brings the best out of them..:) Very realistic..And after the fight their make up is best!!!
ReplyDeleteAwww..Khanak cried and Shaan was unfazed..Looks like he is on the verge of getting fed up of her worrying for her family..Will ever the situation arise of Khanak choosing between Shaan and her family??? Hope not!!!
Dadi is so sweet..She understands ShaNak always!!!
She decided not to talk..She speaks a lot during making love and of course while fighting with him..:D Shaan will make her to talk..;)
Looking forward and thanks for writing an amazing update..:)
Ditto! Me too...when both fight it brings so much excitement to the story and the problems to the fore :D
DeleteMaybe thats why he kept on asking if she'll consider going to Pune...thats a start of making a choice between him and her family, right now I don't see her bowing down to easily, she'll give him a good fight :P
The two updates were explosive! LOVED it :)
ReplyDeleteJust incredible!!!
The ouch moments were bang on
I was waiting for this day when he spits it...he is tolerant to a point but he isn’t giving especially once an event takes up their time together! No-one will understand the absurd amount of care she has for her family even I DONT particularly for the reason half of her family is ruthless towards her...I mean helping out every time is not supreme, she can send money why does have to validate herself and be THERE!
Both are correct in their stance BUT its only when both will start to acknowledge!
Shantanu was hit on with the ‘her’ family obligations! SHE is not the only person responsible...she has her only LIFE but it does not justify his inane hours of work!
Hahaha! The line she said ‘you made me cry sounded’ like I need a hug :D It was sooooo cute :)
But he is sucha cute dork acting unmoved although is unwillingly concerned which is the reason he is following and waiting for her :)
Daddddiiiii....Bless her! I want to be in her place and watch this couple...she is just adorable! AND Rahat needs to disappear what a pain in the a**! Urgh!
Aditeee....that is so unfair! You cannot stop :| We need a update soon for the reconciliation part
Thanks youuu :)
the update was superlative Aditee!! the positive part about their fight is that atleast they talk about the issues between them!! the care that Shaan shows inspite of their fights is really sweet......love his concern towards her!! and Khanak just loves being with her husband!! just a request Aditee........please will you give us a glimpse of what happens when they go back to their room...........thanks for writing an awesome part!!
ReplyDeleteLoved the update aditee :D
ReplyDeleteooohhhhh! AC's are not working properly:P Heat badthayi jaa raha hain :P
Finally she let out everything..
Even i want to know the room part like vineeta :D:P
Besharami ki hadd! :P
Can't help, you evoke such thoughts in my mind:P
Waiting for next..update soon:D
As always lovely update :)
ReplyDeleteLoved their fight lolzz they r awesome da way they r!!
Waiting 4 next part........
Update soon!
Dadi so so cute.. she knows everything.. and Khanak and her reasons.. too much..
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